07 届高考英语作文演练与讲评
最近你班举行了一场关于"动物园里笼养动物好不好"的讨论.假如你是李华, 最近你班举行了一场关于"动物园里笼养动物好不好"的讨论.假如你是李华,请你根据下表提 供的信息,用英语将讨论的结果向某中学生英语报投稿,并陈述你的观点(至少发挥一条) 注意: .注意 供的信息,用英语将讨论的结果向某中学生英语报投稿,并陈述你的观点(至少发挥一条) 注意: . 左右. 字数 100 左右. 赞成的同学认为 1,有机会亲眼目睹野生动物. ,有机会亲眼目睹野生动物. 2,有助于培养对动物和自然的爱. ,有助于培养对动物和自然的爱. 3, , 能保护动物免于野生环境的危险. 能保护动物免于野生环境的危险. Dear Editor, I'm writing to tell you about the discussion we held on whether it is good to keep animals in zoos. 反对的同学认为 1,浪费人力物力. ,浪费人力物力. 2,破坏生态平衡. ,破坏生态平衡. 3,动物失去自由. ,动物失去自由. …… 你的观点

作文讲评 【审题】①文体:议论文;②人称:第三,第一人称;③时态:一般现在时 审题】 文体:议论文; 人称:第三,第一人称; 时态: 提纲】 【提纲】 第一节:很多同学赞成动物园笼养动物.(他们认为这样)(人们就)有机会亲眼目睹野生动物, 第一节:很多同学赞成动物园笼养动物.(他们认为这样)(人们就)有机会亲眼目睹野生动物, .(他们认为这样)(人们就 这有助于培养(人们)对动物和自然的爱;(同时,)(笼养)还能保护动物免于野生环境的危险. ;(同时,)(笼养 这有助于培养(人们)对动物和自然的爱;(同时,)(笼养)还能保护动物免于野生环境的危险. 第二节:(相反地)很多也同学不赞成动物园笼养动物.(他们认为)笼养动物浪费人力物力, 第二节:(相反地)很多也同学不赞成动物园笼养动物.(他们认为)笼养动物浪费人力物力,破 :(相反地 .(他们认为 坏生态平衡.同时,动物也失去自由. 坏生态平衡.同时,动物也失去自由. 第三节:在我看来,笼养野生动物是错误的,为了保证他们健康成长和生态平衡, 第三节:在我看来,笼养野生动物是错误的,为了保证他们健康成长和生态平衡,应该释放所有野 生动物. 生动物. 【圈点短语,句型】 圈点短语,句型】 同意/支持……观点;反对……观点; ……的机会 看一看…… 培养对……的热爱;保护…… ……观点 ……观点 的机会; ……; ……的热爱 ……免 同意/支持……观点;反对……观点;有……的机会;看一看……;培养对……的热爱;保护……免 ……;防止…… 逃离…… 免受…… 侵害);一则…… 再则…… ……; ……; ……( );一则……, ……; ……没好处 没好处; 于……;防止……;逃离……;免受……(侵害);一则……,再则……;做……没好处;对…… 有完全不同观点; ……的浪费 的浪费; ……有负面影响 有负面影响; ……有坏处 剥夺…… 有坏处; ……; ……为基础 为基础; 有完全不同观点;是……的浪费;对……有负面影响;对……有坏处;剥夺……;以……为基础; ……比较而言 释放;保持生态平衡; 比较而言; 与……比较而言;释放;保持生态平衡;就个人而言 【灵活表达要点】先写简单句,再添加连接词,改写成复合句. 灵活表达要点】先写简单句,再添加连接词,改写成复合句. 很多同学赞成动物园笼养动物. 他们认为这样) 人们就)有机会亲眼目睹野生动物, (他们认为这样 (人们就 很多同学赞成动物园笼养动物. 他们认为这样) 人们就)有机会亲眼目睹野生动物, ( ( 这有助于培养(人们)对动物和自然的爱;(同时,)(笼养)还能保护动物免于野生环境的危险 ;(同时,)(笼养 境的危险. 这有助于培养(人们)对动物和自然的爱;(同时,)(笼养)还能保护动物免于野生环境的危险.
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  1) 很多同学赞成动物园笼养动物: 很多同学赞成动物园笼养动物 ① Many students in our class support the idea that animals can be kept in zoos. ② Many students in our class agree that zoos can keep some wild animals.
③ Some of the students in our class think it (is) a good idea to keep animals in zoos. (
  2) 他们认为这样就)有机会亲眼目睹野生动物: (他们认为这样就)有机会亲眼目睹野生动物: ① They argue that they will have the opportunity to see wild animals if (they are) kept in zoos. ② They think that if animals are kept in zoos, they can go and have a clear look at them. ③ They believe that only in this way, can they watch wild animals easily, clearly and safely. (
  3) 这有助于培养(人们)对动物和自然的热爱. 这有助于培养(人们)对动物和自然的热爱. ① It helps (to) increase people's love for animals and nature if they see wild animals in zoos. ② Taking a look at wild animals can increase people's love for animals and nature. ③ It is good for people to see animals in zoos, because they can develop a further understanding of animals and nature. (
  4) (笼养)还能保护动物免于野生环境的危险 笼养) ① Wild animals can be protected from dangers in the wild. ② Wild animals can be prevented from being endangered if they are kept in zoos.
③ Animals kept in zoos can get away from the dangers in the wild. 试比较下列句式】 【试比较下列句式】 ① Those who favor the idea think it provides chances for people to see wild animals. It might also develop people's love for animals and nature. Besides, animals in zoos can be protected from dangers in the wild. ② Some of the students agree with the idea, arguing (that) it is good to keep animals in zoos. For one thing, they can have a look at wild animals and thus develop their love for animals and nature, and for another, wild animals can be free from dangers in the wild.
③ Some of the students are for the idea, holding the opinion that people can develop further understanding of animals and nature if they can see animals in zoos and that animals kept in zoos can get away from dangers in the wild. ④ Some of the students support the idea, saying (that) if animals are kept in zoos, they can be protected from dangers in the wild and that people will also have the opportunity to see theses animals, which helps (to) increase people's love for animals and nature. (相反地)很多也同学不赞成动物园笼养动物.(他们认为)笼养动物浪费人力物力, 相反地)很多也同学不赞成动物园笼养动物.(他们认为)笼养动物浪费人力物力, .(他们认为 破坏生态平衡.同时,动物也失去自由. 破坏生态平衡.同时,动物也失去自由.
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  1) 很多也同学不赞成动物园笼养动物: 很多也同学不赞成动物园笼养动物 ① Other students are against the idea about keeping animals in zoos. ② Other students think it (is) no good keeping animals in zoos.
③ The rest of the students have a totally different attitude towards the idea. (
  2) 他们认为)笼养动物浪费人力物力,破坏生态平衡: (他们认为)笼养动物浪费人力物力,破坏生态平衡 ① They think (that) it is a waste of money and labor to keep animals in zoos and that it will damage the balance of nature. ② They argue (that) keeping animals in zoos is a waste of money and, worse still, will have a negative effect on the balance of nature. ③ They believe that it is a waste of money and labor to keep animals in zoos, which will also do harm to the balance of nature. (
  3) 同时/另外,动物也失去自由 同时 另外,动物也失去自由: 另外 ① At the same time, animals will lose their freedom if caged in zoos. ② Besides, animals will have no freedom when kept in zoos.
③ In addition, animals will be deprived of freedom when living in zoos. 试比较下列句式】 【试比较下列句式】 ① However, those who are against the idea think that it's a waste of money and labor to keep animals in zoos. It'll also damage the balance of nature. Besides, animals will lose their freedom if caged in zoos. ② Totally different from those above, the rest of the students have the different opinion based on three facts. First, keeping animals in zoos is a waste of money and labor. Second, it will have a negative influence on the balance of nature. Third, animals will be deprived of freedom if kept in zoos. ③ On the contrary, other students hold the opposite opinion, arguing that keeping animals in zoos is a waste of money and labor, and will also damage the balance of nature and that animals will lose freedom if caged in zoos. ④ Compared with those mentioned above, other students have a totally different attitude, believing that keeping animals in zoos does great harm to the balance of nature and deprives the animals of freedom and that it is also a waste of money and labor.
  3. 在我看来,笼养野生动物是错误的,应该释放所有野生动物 以保证生态平衡. 在我看来,笼养野生动物是错误的,应该释放所有野生动物, 以保证生态平衡. ① In my opinion, it is wrong to keep animals in zoos. All animals should be set free so as to keep the balance of nature. ② Personally speaking, I insist that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos and that animals (should) be set free to keep the balance of nature.
③ I personally feel it is wrong to take animals away from their natural living areas and keep them locked up. I suggest the animals (should) be set free to keep the balance of nature. 【添加连词,连段成篇】 添加连词,连段成篇】 Dear editor, I'm writing to tell you about the discussion we held on whether it is good to keep animals in zoos. Those who favor the idea think it provides chances for people to see wild animals. It might also develop people's love for animals and nature. Besides, animals in zoos can be protected from dangers in the wild. However, those who are against the idea think that it's a waste of money and labor to keep animals in zoos. It'll also damage the balance of nature. Animals will lose their freedom if caged in zoos. I personally feel it is wrong to take animals away from their natural living areas and keep them locked up. Yours sincerely, Li Hua
今年南京市做出决定, 允许居民在春节期间定点燃放烟花爆竹. 这一决定受到了大多数人的欢迎, 也遭到了部分人的反对.最近,你班就春节期间该不该燃放烟花爆竹进行了一场讨论.请你根据以 下信息,给一家英文报纸写一篇短文,客观介绍你们的讨论情况,并就如何安全燃放烟花爆竹提出 你的看法. 60%赞成 1,增加节日气氛 2,传统的中国文化习俗 需要用的词汇:燃放烟花爆竹 set off fireworks 要求:1,短文必须包括所给要点;2,短文的开头已为你写好;3,字数 100 左右. The government of Nanjing lifted the ban on fireworks during the 2006 Spring Festival. Recently, …… 40%反对 1,危害公共安全,造成人身伤害 2,污染环境 你的观点 ……
 

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