高考复习
书面表达评析及指导 书面表达评析及指导
If you are the teacher
假定你是李华, 你的英国朋友Peter Peter来信询问你 假定你是李华, 你的英国朋友Peter来信询问你 的英语学习情况并希望你简单介绍自己家乡, 的英语学习情况并希望你简单介绍自己家乡,请你根 据下列要点写回信。 据下列要点写回信。 要点: 要点: 我学英语已经六年了,
  1. 我学英语已经六年了,在老师和同学们的帮助下 取得了一些进步; 取得了一些进步; 但是总觉得英语难学,
  2. 但是总觉得英语难学,尤其是英语中的一些习惯 用法; 用法; 今后一定要努力学习这门有用的外语,
  3. 今后一定要努力学习这门有用的外语,争取能用 流利的英语和你写信; 流利的英语和你写信; 我的家乡发生很大的变化,盖起了许多高楼,
  4. 我的家乡发生很大的变化,盖起了许多高楼,拓 宽了道路,变得越来越漂亮和现代化; 宽了道路,变得越来越漂亮和现代化;
  5. 如果有时间可以到中国来,我会带领你参观我的 如果有时间可以到中国来, 家乡。 家乡。
注意: 注意: 词数100左右; 100左右
  1. 词数100左右; 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
  2. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯; 开头语已为你写好。
  3. 开头语已为你写好。
June 8, 2008 Dear Peter, I'm very glad to receive your letter. I will tell you something about my English study and hometown. ………….
samples of student work
字数不够或未能传达读者任何信息,不得分。 字数不够或未能传达读者任何信息,不得分。 未能传达读者任何信息
samples of student work
Bad sample
卷 不 ; ; ; ; 11 面 不 整 洁 ; ; ; ; ; ; ; ; ; ; ; ;
samples of student work
read and write
find it hard
103f ent English to write had taken place in my hometown buildings roads widened
Great changes
It will be wonderful when I will be glad to
you come to China if you are free show you around
语言不地道;中文式思维;语言错误较多,得分13分 语言不地道;中文式思维;语言错误较多,得分13分 13
samples of student work learn
of the teachers and my
progress
read and write
it hard to learn hard work.
write letters in fluent English found
had become
Welcome to China if you have time show you around
语言素质 较好;基本功不差 语句仍有毛病;得15分. 较好 基本功不差;语句仍有毛病; 分 基本功不差 语句仍有毛病
samples of student work
progress
well

widened roads My hometown is becoming more and more
are
词汇有错误;卷面有涂改; 19分 词汇有错误;卷面有涂改;得19分.
影响书面表达得分的因素: 影响书面表达得分的因素:
◆语言表达出现“大错误”及“小错误” 语言表达出现“大错误” 小错误” “大错误”包括时态错误、句子结构错误、中 大错误”包括时态错误、句子结构错误、 式英语等, 式英语等,如:
  1.My hometown had big change, build many houses, ……
  2. My hometown has great changes. →Great changes had taken place in my hometown there. For example, many new houses had been built and roads had been widened.

  3. If you get to China that have time, me with you look my hometown.
→I hope you’l l get a chance to come to China and I’ll show you around my hometown if you are free .

  4. I will welcome to you. →Welcome to China. 小错误” ◆“小错误”主要是反应在个别单词拼写错误、 小错误 主要是反应在个别单词拼写错误、 冠词介词使用不准确等方面,如 冠词介词使用不准确等方面 如: Under my teacher and classmates all help to me ,……. →With the help of my teachers and classmates,……
◆没有使用高级词汇和复杂句

  1. I will visit my hometown with you.
  2. If you have time, I will take you to travel around my hometown. →I will show you around my hometown if you are free.
◆书写是否工整清晰也会影 响答卷得分。卷面不整洁, 响答卷得分。卷面不整洁, 涂改多;大小写;标点符号; 涂改多;大小写;标点符号; 书写不清,得分会很低! 书写不清,得分会很低!
审题不认真, ◆ 审题不认真,要点有所遗漏 注意: 注意:
彻底理解题意,
  1. 彻底理解题意,看准答题要求 包括字数要求)。 (包括字数要求)。 把内容要点在稿纸上列成提纲。
  2. 把内容要点在稿纸上列成提纲。 连词成句,连句成文。
  3. 连词成句,连句成文。
  4.成文后认真检查,确信无一遗漏。
  4.成文后认真检查,确信无一遗漏。 成文后认真检查
书面表达评分最高标准( 2125分 25 书面表达评分最高标准(第五档 2125分)
完全完成了试题规定的任务, 完全完成了试题规定的任务,覆盖 所有内容要点。 所有内容要点。 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 ★ 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 ★ 语法结构和词汇方面有些错误,但 语法结构和词汇方面有些错误, 为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇 所致;具备较强的语言运用能力。 所致;具备较强的语言运用能力。 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分, ★ 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分, 使全文结构紧凑。 使全文结构紧凑。

One possible version:
June 8, 2008 Dear Peter, I'm very glad to receive your letter. I will tell you something about my English study and hometown.
It is six years since I began to learn English. With the help of my teachers and classmates, I have made some progress in English. However I still find English hard to learn, such as some difficult idioms which made me confused. No matter how hard it is, I have made up my mind to master this useful language by my hard work.
Not long ago I returned to my hometown and found great changes had taken place there. Many new houses had been built and roads had been widened. My hometown is getting modern and more and more beautiful. I hope if you have a chance to come to China and I ’ll show you around my hometown when you are on leave. Best wishes, Li Hua
My Suggestions:
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  1. beautiful words and expressions
  2. proper sentence structures
  3. connections between sentences
  4. proper complex sentences
  5. writing models
Six steps for writing (写作六步骤) 写作六步骤) 写作六步骤

  1. Cross-question(审题 审题) 审题 ※ Main idea ※ Style ※ Verb tense ※ Person

  4. Sentences connection(连句 连句) 连句 Words/phrases Sentences

  2. Seize the major points /key words (抓要点 抓要点) 抓要点

  5. Express your opinion (发表观点) 发表观点) 发表观点
sentences passage
Conjunctions/ conjunctive adverbs

  3.Arrangement(布局 ! 布局) 布局

  6. Error correcting ( 查错改错 查错改错)
Dear Smith I was so pleased to hear from you and am writing to tell you something about my school. You’re right. Quite a few changes have taken place in our school . On one side of the road is a new teaching building; On the other side,where the playground used to be, stands another new building-our library. The playground is now in front of the school .We have also planted a lot of trees in and round the school. I hope that you will be able to return and see the changes for yourself someday. Best wishes,
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Yours Li Hua
增强书面表达效果的技巧

  1. 使用较高级的词汇 词汇反映你知识贮存量的 多少, 多少,也是衡量英语水平 的一个重要标志。 的一个重要标志。 运用得当的句子结构可以 给文章增色不少, 给文章增色不少,从而使 整篇文章因此而生辉 。 使用恰当连接词, 使用恰当连接词,对写一 篇有“英语味” 篇有“英语味”的文章很 重要, 重要,能使文章上下衔接 自然、紧凑。 自然、紧凑。
技 巧

  2. 使用较 的

  3. 使用


I. 怎样使用较高级的词汇

  1. Because the weather was good, our journey was comfortable. (幸亏 幸亏…) 幸亏
Thanks to the good weather, our journey was comfortable.

  2.We all think he is a great man. (评价很高) 评价很高) We all think highly of him .
  3.Suddenly I thought out a good idea. (occur) ) A good idea occurred to me. / A good idea suddenly struck me.

  4.The students there needn’t pay for their books.
(免费的) Books are free for the students there. 免费的)

  5. She went to Australia in order to study music. (purpose) ) She went to Australia for the purpose of studying music.
  6. When he spoke, he felt more and more excited. (the 比较级,the 比较级) 比较级, 比较级) The more he spoke, the more excited he felt.
丰富的句式: 常用到的句型结构) II. 丰富的句式:(常用到的句型结构) 利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思, 利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思,能增 加文章的文采。 加文章的文采。

  1.感叹句 感叹句
How happy I was when I received your letter!

  2.强调句 强调句
It was this young boy who helped the old granny.

  3.倒装句 倒装句
Only in this way can you solve this problem.

  4.省略句 省略句
They read while walking or riding on a bus.

  5、with短语 、 短语
I saw a young lady walking slowly in the street with a handbag in her hand.

  6、定语从句 、
Let’s come to the main teaching building, at the back of which stands the school library.

  7、各种名词性从句 各种名词性从句
That’s what I should do.

  8、各种状语从句 各种状语从句
Time passed quickly before we knew it.
III.常用的连接词 常用的

  1. 表示递进;在同一话题上补充内容 表示递进 在同一话题上补充内容 另外, 另外,还有: what’s more; besides;
also; moreover; in addition

  2. 表示转折关系
但是, 然而, 但是, 然而, 相反: but; however; yet; instead; on the other hand; on the contrary.

  3. 表示因果关系
因为,因此, 因为,因此,所以: since; as; because (of ); so; thus; therefore; as a result;

  4. 表示条件关系
如果,只要 如果,只要: if ; on condition ( that ); as long as 除非: 否则: 除非 unless 否则 or else

  5. 表示时间关系
当… 的时候 : when ; while 之后: 之前: 在…之后 after 在…之前 before 之后 之前 直到: 直到 until 直到… 直到…才…: not……until…… 一…就… : as soon as 就 后来, 然后: 后来, 然后 later; afterwards 不久: 近来: 不久 soon 近来 lately; recently 自从… 从那时起: 自从 :since 从那时起 from then on

  6. 表示特定的顺序关系
首先: 最主要的: 首先 firstly 最主要的 above all 其次: 然后: 其次 secondly 然后 then; next 最后: 最后 finally; in the end

  7. 换一种方法表述
换句话说: 换句话说 in other words;
that is to say;

  8. 进行举例说明
例如,比如: 例如,比如 for instance; for example; like; such as that is to say, namely, actually, and so on, believe it or not, to tell you the truth, for this reason

  9. 用于陈述事实
实际上: 实际上 in fact; actually; as a matter of fact 跟你说实话 : to tell you the truth

  10. 对一个话题进行总结
总而言之,总的来说 总而言之,总的来说: on the whole; in short; all in all; in general; in a word, finally, in conclusion, generally speaking, as you know, in the end , 其它常用到的副词 therefore ; otherwise ; finally ; furthermore ; thus ; namely ; although ; afterwards ; personally;

  12. 表示结果: thus, therefore, so, as a 表示结果:
result, seeing that, luckily, unfortunately

  13. 表示强调: above all, indeed, surely, 表示强调:
certainly, of course, after all, without any delay, at least, at most , most important, undoubtedly

  6. 表示特定的顺序关系
首先: 最主要的: 首先 firstly 最主要的 above all 其次: 然后: 其次 secondly 然后 then; next 最后: 最后 finally; in the end

  7. 换一种方法表述
换句话说: 换句话说 in other words;
that is to say;
Practice
Ladies and gentlemen, 联合国教科文组织某考察团正 在我国某乡村参观考察。 在我国某乡村参观考察。假定你是 接待人员,请根据下列提示以发言稿 接待人员 请根据下列提示以发言稿 的形式简要介绍这个村的情况: 的形式简要介绍这个村的情况:
  1)大小:近100户人家,约500口人。 大小: 户人家, 口人。 大小 户人家 口人
  2)变化:过去很穷,78年后变化很 变化:过去很穷, 年后变化很 变化 人们生活比以前好多了。 大。人们生活比以前好多了。现已 旧貌换新颜。 旧貌换新颜。
  3)教育:原来的学校很小,现已经 教育:原来的学校很小, 教育 过改建。新建的教学楼有4层 过改建。新建的教学楼有 层,是 村里最美的建筑物。 村里最美的建筑物。村所有学龄儿 童在此免费就读。 童在此免费就读。 注意: )要点齐全,前后连贯。 注意:
  1)要点齐全,前后连贯。
  2)词数:100-120之间。 )词数: 之间。 之间 Welcome to our school.This village is very small. It has nearly 100 families a
 

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